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Literature Text

A series of
red lights and rain
a quiet drive
contemplating something, anything
water drops slide down the window
leaving a lonely trail of water
next to all the other lonely trails
wumph wumph wumph wumph
they try to push the water away

At the driveway I wrap my stuff
put it on the rock next to me
and sit.
The lady walking by doesn't see
too intent on what's ahead
the lady coming to my door
paid to advertise in the rain
says, "Do you live here"
I suppose my stuff is here
but I'd rather it all go away

Crumpled notes on random paper
"Is that a poem?"
"No, just some things I had to write down."
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chemmisforest's avatar
I so want to sit in the rain. I've danced in the rain though, and that's fun.
This is a beautiful poem. It flows perfectly, and the simplicity really creates an advanced poem. You also perfectly show the reader what's going on but you still leave a lot to the imagination.
MAN I wish I could have your talent! I've been spitting out songs lately, and their desperate for improvement. XD
My favorite lines are the last two. Their perfect.